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PROFESSOR’S COMMENTS ON HWAT NEEDS TO BE FIXED

I have reviewed your chapters 2 and 3 and attached them.  You are supposed to have the  Ten Strategic Points at the beginning of your document and then your title page, but you have the  Ten Strategic Points document in appendix A and begin with your title page.  You need to have this  Ten Strategic Points document as the very first page in your document and appendix A should be left blank until you have completed your dissertation.  I did notice when I read your  Ten Strategic Points document that there are a sufficient number of incorrect entries and too much information in all of the sections of the document.  What you should do is use bullets or very short sentences because you do not need to put a lot of information in this form since each section of the chapters will have the complete information of what is requested in this form.

Make sure that when you click on a page in the  Table of Contents that you are taken to that specific page that is indicated.  Currently when I click on chapter 2, I am taken instead to the title page.  Next, you should delete the following pages:

ALL RIGHTS RESERVED

DISSERTATION COMMITTEE APPROVAL

The Dissertation Title Appears in Title Case and is Centered

Abstract page along with the accompanying template

Dedication page ,

Acknowledgements page

Delete the  List of Figures and  List of Tables shown under the  Table of Contents unless you actually have one or more entries of these items under one or both of this topics in your document.

All of these pages are not needed at the present time, since you must have your first three chapters approved by your committee.  After approval by your committee the first three chapters will be submitted to level 2, which will then be reviewed and include the approval from an AQR reviewer, after which you must successfully defend your document.  After approval of your three chapters, then you will need to reinsert all of the pages back in your document you deleted since you will be completing your dissertation.

There was item that I did not understand was whether or not you are going to concentrate on studying your topics in either South Texas or the entire State of Texas.  It appeared that in some sections in the text you identified one area and then in the same paragraph you shifted to another area of Texas.  You also have too many subheading that you use which are not necessary.

One of the major items that your entries in the text are judged on are the rubrics in each section of the chapter.  Make sure that you always look at the rubric below each section and respond to that specific rubric in your text.  This is what your text is graded on by your committee members and AQR reviewer.

Also noted was that you have too much text for your chapter 2.  I counted a total of 67 pages, which is too much.  Always check the template for each section for the number of pages or paragraphs for that section and use that number for your text entries.

I would like for you to address all of the comments or make the corrections that I have indicated in the either the text or the right-hand margin.  I did notice that was a couple of entries in the right-hand margin with the name of  Dr. June Maul , who I suppose was a previous committee member but should be deleted.  However, if you should disagree with one or more of my comments or just want to make a comment on any issue in the text, just contact me.  We can have a discussion on any issue that you disagree with concerning my comments or suggestions.  You have  four options that are available to contact me.  First, you can contact me by either email, LDP, telephone call, or you can request a Zoom conference call.  If you use an email response, i.e., word document, then send it to me with your concerns or questions listed along with the issue you want to discuss.  Whenever you are through making the revisions, send me your document again and I will review it.